Article Mistake corrections

The AKC Cell-C article needs work at :
The former head honcho of Vodacom says his hoping to refocus the company...
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The chief executive says his hoping to make a contribution to the network whilst also picking up where his predecessor Lars Reichelt left off.
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This is a "journalist" that can't get pronouns right??! Also, possibly more as a style point, 'whilst' used there is just horrible, 'while' fits so much better; y'all can read about while/whilst usage here. :p
 
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Once more unto the breach: in her Which Samsung devices article the *cough* 'journalist' wrote
According to Vodacom’s interim results published in September last year, there it had more than 4.1m smartphone users in the country.
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Um, what? Maybe "they had more than.."?

Methinks
Samsung’s three tablet models, the Galaxy 10.1, 8.9 as well as the Galaxy 7” tablet are gaining popularity with the local market, said Samsung’s Paulo Ferreira, head of mobile product and software solutions.
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could also do with the changes shown.
 
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I'm being an ass, I know

bdt said:
Once more unto the breach: in her Which Samsung devices article the *cough* 'journalist' wrote Um, what? Maybe "they had more than.."?

Methinks could also do with the changes shown.
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That is a republished Moneyweb article written by Gugulethu Mfuphi, however Vodacom is a singular genderless brand name on its own (without overcomplicating the inclusion of subsidiaries and registered company names etc), I therefore suggest deleting "there" and leaving "it had more" as is (instead of replacing "it" with "they"). One could also replace "it" with "Vodacom" to reduce ambiguity.
 
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Derrick had a good run with his ZeroCore article: :p

First, as above. Then:
The other ‘only thing’ gamers care about is price; we usually have a set budget for a graphics card and will go for the option that gives the most bang for their bucks.
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That would be we/our or they/their.
ZeroCore is also beneficial when running a crossfire system.
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Like ZeroCore, CrossFire is a CamelCase name, and is now apparently CrossFireX™ but what's an errant X between friends? Then, had I been his subbie I would threaten to pull out his semicolon key but as I'm not I'll just grumble to myself. :)
 
Businesses and consumers based in the “city of gold” will be able access quality broadband services in the first half of 2013 with speeds of up to one terabit a second.
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Should be "will be able to access"
 
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On the opening page there is this heading: Twitter abuzz with Steve Jobs birthday wished Should be either wishes or wish? J
 
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