bdt
Executive Member
"iBurst's Commercial WiMax Network Goes Live" article at iBurst's Commercial WiMax Network Goes Live errata:
The title for a start: it's WiMAX. The usage is being mixed with 3 instances of "WiMAX" in the article body and 13 of "WiMax", including the heading (but not the title-bar heading) and both excluding instances in the 'Related news' side-bar.
Para.3 starts with "iBurst WiMax is a next generation wireless access technology offering a wireless alternative to fixed line services such as leased line offerings." The accepted form here is hyphenated, as in "next-generation".
Para.7 reads "Included in the cost for the services is internet access, line rental, WiMAX Modem, antenna and for assured product offerings a Cisco router and a static IP address." - 'modem' need/should not be capitalised there, there's no need for a Proper Noun
here.
Para.8, sentence 2 reads "Included in these was a software upgrade for the WiMax device, reduction in size of the antenna’s and network enhancements to ensure quality of service." - apostrophe abuse, that should be a hanging offence!
The same goes for the bulleted section at the end of the article: "*Broadband – Broadband service with low contention ratio’s" - NO man! Oh, and fullstops would be nice too.
The title for a start: it's WiMAX. The usage is being mixed with 3 instances of "WiMAX" in the article body and 13 of "WiMax", including the heading (but not the title-bar heading) and both excluding instances in the 'Related news' side-bar.
Para.3 starts with "iBurst WiMax is a next generation wireless access technology offering a wireless alternative to fixed line services such as leased line offerings." The accepted form here is hyphenated, as in "next-generation".
Para.7 reads "Included in the cost for the services is internet access, line rental, WiMAX Modem, antenna and for assured product offerings a Cisco router and a static IP address." - 'modem' need/should not be capitalised there, there's no need for a Proper Noun
here.Para.8, sentence 2 reads "Included in these was a software upgrade for the WiMax device, reduction in size of the antenna’s and network enhancements to ensure quality of service." - apostrophe abuse, that should be a hanging offence!
The same goes for the bulleted section at the end of the article: "*Broadband – Broadband service with low contention ratio’s" - NO man! Oh, and fullstops would be nice too.
Will do